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Verse I.
Let us see,
If you can write me a half-hearted melody.
You're what I need,
So come and show me,
When I should take the lead.

Chorus.
LETS GO!

SHOW ME THE ROAD

RIGHT NOW!

BEFORE I FOLD

SCREAMING!

BREAK YOUR HOLD

verse II.
Was it meant to be?
Did you even care?
Was I the one to follow?
I dont see you as the one for me.
You make me feel almost bare.
Everything you say is just too hard to swallow.

Chorus.
LETS GO!

SHOW ME THE ROAD

RIGHT NOW!

BEFORE I FOLD

SCREAMING!

BREAK YOUR HOLD

FACE DOWN!

Verse III.
As i lie here face down,
Wishing you would just tell me now,
why can't I just watch my hopes drown?
You had me wound,
but you got too close this time around.
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is it better or not?
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I like turtles and polar bears.
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