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Untitled... if you can think of one id love to hear it :)

Post by cookie monster »

I wrote this song thinking about Bradley Nowell... its pretty much how i pictured his last few days battling with addiction. The lines "One day i will lose the war" are directly from his song pool shark. On a deeper note the song is more so about struggling with yourself... you could say the angels and devils on all of our shoulders. Feel free to comment on anything.

Verse
Talking to myself again
Holding on to my own hand
Sweating needles, Pissing pins
A war I will never win

Gazing to her angelic face
As tears fall to the picture frame
I turn her eyes so she can’t see
A zombie that’s become of me

Chorus
Feeling so lost without you
I’ve never been so lost without
Feeling so lost without you
I have been so lost without

I wish I pray that I could change
I see her face on everything
Shaking sobbing heart inflame
Hopelessly find my vein

Feeling so lost without you
I’ve never been so lost without
Feeling so lost without you
I have been so lost without… you

Verse
One day I will lose the war
Laying lifeless on the floor
A legacy behind my name
28 years ashamed….

Point the blame on a broken past
Depression poor and wrong led paths
Say anything you want to
The scars on my arms weren’t made by you

Chorus
Feeling so lost without you
I’ve never been so lost without
Feeling so lost without you
I have been so lost without… you

So I sit on top of the world
And all my dreams have been fulfilled
Yet I feel a hole in me
I will never truly be free…

Feeling so lost without you
I’ve never been so lost without
Feeling so lost without you
I have been so lost without… you

Solo

Chorus
Feeling so lost without you
I’ve never been so lost without
Feeling so lost without you
I have been so lost without…you

One day I will lose the war
And if I’m lifeless on the floor
I just want you to know
You were why I lived each day

Feeling so lost without you
I’ve never been so lost without
Feeling so lost without you
I have been so lost without… you
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Post by vilppu5115 »

how about 'lost' as a title?
He who joyfully marches to music in rank and file has already earned my contempt. He has been given a large brain by mistake, since for him the spinal cord would fully suffice.

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Post by MrsV »

yeah i like that..
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Post by cookie monster »

works for me
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Post by andrew spangler »

pretty good song.
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