The Devil in Mrs. Jackson
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- Hillgrass Bluebilly FTW
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The Devil in Mrs. Jackson
The Devil in Mrs. Jackson
I thought I heard you whisper,
why'd you come round my door?
This yellow ghost is no longer our home,
I sleep on the couch, when I'm alone.
Oh Mrs. Jackson, what a clever disguise,
by now I see the devil behind your eyes.
Think of me, while you lay next to him,
why steal my words if you didn't mean them?
We could of blazed a trail with our lust,
loving no other and turning to grey rust.
But we're back where we were before,
why'd you come round my door?
You'll realize, what glitters may not be gold,
soon all thats left are memories to be sold.
Your touch burns like acid through my veins,
can't numb it, can't kill the pain.
You spread your love all over town,
used it all up before my turn came around.
Oh Mrs. Jackson, why'd you do this to me?
I prefer the whisper much better than the scream.
The names may or may not have been changed to affect the guilty.
I thought I heard you whisper,
why'd you come round my door?
This yellow ghost is no longer our home,
I sleep on the couch, when I'm alone.
Oh Mrs. Jackson, what a clever disguise,
by now I see the devil behind your eyes.
Think of me, while you lay next to him,
why steal my words if you didn't mean them?
We could of blazed a trail with our lust,
loving no other and turning to grey rust.
But we're back where we were before,
why'd you come round my door?
You'll realize, what glitters may not be gold,
soon all thats left are memories to be sold.
Your touch burns like acid through my veins,
can't numb it, can't kill the pain.
You spread your love all over town,
used it all up before my turn came around.
Oh Mrs. Jackson, why'd you do this to me?
I prefer the whisper much better than the scream.
The names may or may not have been changed to affect the guilty.
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- Hillgrass Bluebilly FTW
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nothing?
you all suck.
you all suck.
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- Hillgrass Bluebilly FTW
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Yeah, well uh.. I ain't too excited about yer little critique dere deek-us.... cause uh, yer a friggin idiot.deek wrote:Eh...not too excited about the rhyming...I enjoy poetry, but when some of it starts rhyming, I lose focus and any sense of meaning...just my two cents...
I kid.
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Heh...
Well, I could just boost your ego and do a blanket reply of how awesome you are, but then what is that going to accomplish?
To expand on my comments, I just find poetry and lyrics less serious, when there is rhyming. And then I get into a rhythm and pay more attention to whether or not each line rhymes and flows, then the actual feelings and content.
And that is what I found myself doing with yours, more interested in whether things rhymed then what you were actually saying...
Well, I could just boost your ego and do a blanket reply of how awesome you are, but then what is that going to accomplish?
To expand on my comments, I just find poetry and lyrics less serious, when there is rhyming. And then I get into a rhythm and pay more attention to whether or not each line rhymes and flows, then the actual feelings and content.
And that is what I found myself doing with yours, more interested in whether things rhymed then what you were actually saying...
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i can't read any of this kind of stuff without putting it to music in my head. . .and despite deek's aversion to the rhyming, i think that this could make a good song.
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I do the same thing as garr. it seems to make a good song,just depends how the music is. ive heard great lyrics with a horrible beat,and hated it. At least you guys have the nerve to put your stuff out here for everyone to attack/praise. I'm sure theres lots of excellent stuff that people just dont post. I'd like to post some stuff,but i dont think its ready just yet,and all you guys are pretty quick on the trigger.
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The truth shall set you free my friend.deek wrote:Heh...
Well, I could just boost your ego and do a blanket reply of how awesome you are, but then what is that going to accomplish?
Yeah, I understand what you're saying about this. When I write I try to make the important statements fit the rhyming scheme.deek wrote:To expand on my comments, I just find poetry and lyrics less serious, when there is rhyming. And then I get into a rhythm and pay more attention to whether or not each line rhymes and flows, then the actual feelings and content.
And that is what I found myself doing with yours, more interested in whether things rhymed then what you were actually saying...
Typically when I write I write as if I were able to make music and make this a song.Garr wrote:i can't read any of this kind of stuff without putting it to music in my head. . .and despite deek's aversion to the rhyming, i think that this could make a good song.
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no i love your mom.flapjacks wrote:why you gotta write about my mom like that?
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